Looking at the many profiles located at Boomerang Box: People Profile Archives there are a few key factors that appear in the profiles that maintain interest. They all provide introductions to the person that raise an interesting question that makes the person intrigueing. The profiles tell what the person does for a living and the basic history of the job in an upbeat, conversational way. Some examples of well written profiles on this site would include those of Alfredo Perez, shipper for Toys ‘R’ Us, and Captain Moore, a ship captain. These profiles don’t use direct qoutes but engage the reader in a way that brings the person’s personality to life. One draw back to the set up of the profiles on this site is the lack of subheadings. Without subheadings it is hard to understand what the profile is about without actually reading it. Otherwise these profiles are very entertaining and easy to read.
What makes a good profile? Well, the first thing you have to take into account is the presentation of your information. You must have an eye-catching title that catches the readers attention and pulls them to your topic. Next, your introduction should be intriguing and cause the reader to continue reading. A boring introduction can cause a person to leave your page in a matter of seconds. While doing all of these, you must keep in mind the people that will be reading your profile. You want to use the appropriate voice and tone for the occasion. For example, we found a profile on Ken Lay that portrayed him as a Christian man that cared about everyone. If you are familiar with business, then you probably know that this was not what he was most famous for during his lifetime. But, given the circumstances of his death, this profile did seem appropriate because his friends and family are the ones that are most likely to be reading up on this profile of their deceased friend or family member. Lastly, you want to include a good conclusion that effectively wraps up the main points you have attempted to get across.
On the Dana Farber Cancer Institute we found several employee profiles. They are effective because they have good, informative introductions. They are also not too long, they are very to the point. The pictures also helped to put a face to the name, and are seen as every day people that others can relate to. The quotes make it more personal when telling the person’s story. The website used a variety of ages and races of people all with unique backgrounds and stories. Subheading are informative and help organize the profile. Each page’s title is descripitve yet creative. It is eye-catching and draws the reader in to be interested in these people, despite the fact that most readers have never met them before.
Keys to a good profile….
1. A personal mission.
2. Principals to which they abide by.
3. A list of accomplishments.
4. Comments/feedback section.
5. Professional stats or accomplishments.
6. Should be up to date.
7. Easy to read and navigate.
An example of a good profile…..
An example of a bad profile…..
This website was made by a girl who reports interviews for a living. She does profiles for a living and has a lot of helpful hints about her reports. One was to remove any extraneous information that is not needed in a report. This can make reports too long and can lose readers interest. Another tip was to provide accurate information during the report at all times. Not only is providing false information illegal, it damages the credibility of all of your other work. Quotes should only be used when emphasizing a point. Too many quotes make the report not a summary just a recap of the interview. The analysis of the interview is what makes the report effective.
Kevin Brandenberg Joe Harnist
A profile article in the DePauw Newspaper provides a good example of how to write a personal profile. This particular article gives background information on the subject of the profile, follwed by personal thoughts from peers and professors. Another great place to find numerous examples of personal profiles is a website called Boomerang Box.
After looking at a variety of personal profiles, there are several similarities:
- Always include an informative title
- Provide a brief background of the subject
- Capture the person’s personality
- Make it an easy read (ex. the use of subheadings)
- Use direct quotes to make the profile more personable
To start off class today Cindy and Sarah gave a presentation on tips for writing a dress code. They discussed aspects such as why there is and need for a dress code as well as why dress codes differ from employer to employer.
As a class activity today, we wrote an employee dress code for MU Bookstore. During class discussion, we considered whether we would want to allow a more edgy appearance to enable the bookstore to change its brand. However, we decided that in order to appeal to all customers that we needed to go with a more middle of the road policy.
As we defined the scenario, bookstore employees could now wear jeans and hanging jewelry; however our policy prohibits such expression.
Students wrote posts on word press blog in an email format giving the employees of the MU Bookstore notice of the new changes in their dress code.
Here is the policy we came up with in class:
Employees should present a professional appearance.
They should wear:
-Polo with khakis
-For employees with extensive body art, a long sleeved shirt should be worn under the polo
No strong perfume or cologne
Well-groomed facial hair
Studs in both ears are ok, no hanging jewelry
A website such as Salary.com has many different examples and ideas on writing policies such as dress code’s that may help as an example.